Right Chris this is a interesting start, but you need to watch your typography, so here are a few points.1. The body copy is too compressed and also using justified has meant gaps in the copy.2. the line fee needs opening as it would be difficult to read, no gaps after the paragraphs.3. Also all options, the copy is 'way too close' to the bottom of the ad.4. 2nd Option doen't work for me.5. You need to go back and look at Saville's typographic style.6. Options 1 & 2 work better, but it you need to explore the type more, to show a real difference.7. Look at your column widths, you would never have one wider, and 2 less in width by the side.Hope this helps.Cheers. Pete.
I think option three speaks to me the most. Bit too tired mate to go into it. speak you in the morn
Right Chris this is a interesting start, but you need to watch your typography, so here are a few points.
ReplyDelete1. The body copy is too compressed and also using justified has meant gaps in the copy.
2. the line fee needs opening as it would be difficult to read, no gaps after the paragraphs.
3. Also all options, the copy is 'way too close' to the bottom of the ad.
4. 2nd Option doen't work for me.
5. You need to go back and look at Saville's typographic style.
6. Options 1 & 2 work better, but it you need to explore the type more, to show a real difference.
7. Look at your column widths, you would never have one wider, and 2 less in width by the side.
Hope this helps.
Cheers. Pete.
I think option three speaks to me the most. Bit too tired mate to go into it. speak you in the morn
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